McNealis, an eighth-grader at Jordan Middle School, said she was inspired to write the story because of her actual time living abroad and traveling while her father was on an expatriate assignment in India.
"It was just a really magical place," she said of her visit to the Himalayas. "I thought the best way to capture that was with writing, so I wove it into a story."
McNealis has competed in other writing competitions, but has more experience with poetry, which she said can be more difficult.
"I like this kind of writing because I don't get stuck as often as when I'm writing poetry," she said. "With poetry you can be limited because of the pattern, but with writing it's easier to pull yourself out and keep going."
To McNealis, who will start as a freshman at Paly next year, the experience was developmental.
"Usually when you're searching for a souvenir it's all about the material but when I was there, I changed, because I decided that wasn't as important," she said. "It's anything that brings back the feelings you felt while you were there instead of something that's cool or fashionable."
This well-written story is filled with rich and convincing details. Here is a writer drawing on something she knows. The story has the sort of confidence that most often originates from direct experience. The narrator changes due to events in the story. Moreover, she thoughtfully reflects on those changes.
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